2 June 2009

ACTION WRITING

Last week we wrote about a time when we went fast. One of our learning intentions was to include some action verbs to make our stories more interesting. Here are some of our stories.




Motorbikes

In September last year I was riding my cousin’s motor bike. I went up a jump and smacked my mouth on the handle bars. So I played PS2 (spider man3). I got bored hard out. I went outside then I got yelled at and sent back inside. I went to sleep and dreamed of being in a circus of one man; a very EVIL man and his name was Divilo he whipped me.

Lane



Crashing
This is a story I heard a long time ago about a crash car. It was a speeding fast adventure. The car was hulking big. Before I knew it I had crashed into a power pole. It’s just about to fall on my shiny car. It looked like a power pole but…it was a very big tree. It was too shiny I crashed into a tree. It was a good adventure. There were lots of other people on a very huge track. It was a long track that goes under and over mountains. He told me when I was 10 or 11.

Mitch


Horse
When I was six I would always catch the horse and gallop my horse called Tussock up and down the paddock. My sister didn’t believe that I could gallop. So I went up the other end of the paddock and galloped back. I did a drift about a metre long.

Kurt



The Dangerous Bull Ride
Once upon a time when I was twenty five I rode a bull. It flipped me off. Until one day I won a million dollars riding bulls, bucking broncos, calves, cows and sheep and I started to live on a farm with horses and no vehicles. It’s really hot in Texas. I got old and if I ride bulls again I could die so just sat down until they asked me to ride horses.

Decan


Motorbike
7 weeks ago I went to my friends. I heard a speeding sound. It came in. It was a motorbike. When I got a turn I flicked through the air. I got splashed and I got soaked. I got off. I got dizzy. It felt like a vibration. I got so dizzy that I felt sick.

Maggie


Roller Coaster
Four years ago I went on a yellow and a red roller coaster. It was so long but when it finished I didn’t get sick. After that I bought a drink and an ice-cream. The drink that I had was a coke. I had a chocolate ice-cream. When I’m drinking my coke I sang after I’ve had a sip. I went to Australia and the roller coaster was at Dream World. When I was on the roller coaster I was upside down and I was holding on tight. I almost fell out. I was singing heaps. Lots of people heard me. When I hopped out some babies were screaming and crying. I got so angry. There were some children being naughty. After that I had some food because I was hungry. I love eating so much. It was fun.

Michaela D.

Motorbiking
Last year I went to my cousin’s house. We had rides on a huge motorbike. My uncle Mark has a garage full of motorbikes. Big, small and huge. My uncle got the big motorbike out of the garage. It has flames they are blue, the rest of it is grey.
I jumped on the motorbike. We zoomed of down the road. I went crazy. You should have seen me. My hair flew.

Lilyrose


Speedway
I went to Robinson Holden speedway and I saw the sprint cars. I watched the racing trucks at stockcars too. My granddad came too. The trucks went fast. There were a lot of cars on their roof. A truck crashed into another track so he had to go into the field.

Jacob

Sailing
Sometimes when I sail my little boats I dream of what it might be like to sail the seven seas. All my friends would be there and we would be dancing in the waves. One night a huge wave splashed over us and we were laughing so much that we fell down and went to sleep. We woke up and we went for a swim and I was soaking wet. The water went on the ground and one of my friends slipped on the water and fell on the ground.

NIKAYLA


Scary
This is a story I heard a long time ago about a boy who was scared of the dark. His name was Book like it rhymes with hook. One night he had to take out the trash. His mum said “do you want a light”. He said “yes”. He ran fast as he could. He tripped over a rock. He hurt his knee and broke the light. He said “I’m not going out side again”. When he got back his mum said “are you ok”. He said that was a horror night.

Vienna-Blayne

Jet Boat
I jumped on a jet boat. I was going about 152 k ph .It was scaring Dad, Mum and Jacob and I got goose bumps. The jet boat almost fell over. I fell out over the boat. When I was in the water they did a rakey and picked me up. I got up on the land when they picked me up. The jet boat was going 265 k kph. It was scary. Dad, Mum, Richard and Jacob got blown out of the boat.

Lucas

Rollercoaster
When I went on a Rollercoaster it went real fast and it made me feel like I was vibrating and it felt like I had butterflies. When we went upside down I nearly fell out. I held on real tight. It felt like I crashed. When I got off I felt dizzy and I cried but then my dad gave me a piggyback . It was a little bit fun. After that we went on this thing that had water under it .

Devon


Hummer
When I went fast was when I blew up my car. It was a Hummer H3. I kept smashing it (but it did not look like a hummer H3). Before I knew it, it was on fire. I knew it blew up because I heard something go BANG. So I got my mums car. I tried to not smash my mum’s car because it was too much money.

Donovan

The Scared Pony
Early this year I was trotting on Gracie. Gracie is a lovely white pony. Her trot was as fast as a v8. A noisy boy racer flew past. She totted as fast as she could. She got faster and faster. She was jumping. We whizzed past the jump. I flew off her back.

Leah

Dragster
I was driving an indelible dragster. I was riding a Holden. I was on a straight and I was going full speed like a jet plane. I did it because I was bored. I suddenly slipped. I hit the throttle, my foot was flat. I thought it was super glued. I was scared I might be disabled. My mum and the rest of the family were cheering. I think I was going 1000 kilometres per hour. I was glad it was over.

Ahurangi


JetBoat
A little while ago I went on a jet boat. It was so cool because the louder it got, the faster it went But then I saw something in the river, so I went closer and closer and then SPLASH. I fell in the river.
The jet boat started. It went my way but it stopped right at the tip of my nose .The man said to me “Hop in”. I didn’t know what to say but by the time to get off the boat I had something to say. That was this story.


By Chloe

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